To mend a broken heart

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Onuzim Ima

Luna Crescens
Aug 11, 2010
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It was okay. As said, try to work on the grammar. :ami:

@Becky Starlight Only a suggestion. If you can write better/feel easier with present tense ('she says' in place of 'she said'), stick to it. I never claimed my writing was perfect, with all this additional punctuation etc. But back then I thought it was necessary to point out where a quote/dialogue ends ;-)
 
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