Tokyoma Gaiden Episode Descriptions and potential extrapolations

[KingPriceman]

I've been thinking for a while, that I would probably need to share episode descriptions and see what people would think of them, if anyone hasn't seen the thread or doesn't know what I'm talking about, these would be episodes concerning these characters:
Opinions on Sailor Moon: Tokyoma Gaiden Characters

I have come up with a few episode ideas:

Pinako's Senshi Origin (OG)
Daniel's Senshi Origin (Manga OG, Anime Partial adaptation)
Katerina's Senshi Origin (OG)

And a few miscellaneous plots:
Two modernized versions of Sailor Moon Episodes
An adaptation of 2 Sailor V chapters (one of them ties into Daniel's Senshi Origin, Anime version)

I'll be putting up one of them soon.

 

[KingPriceman]

For the first episode to be posted (but not the first chronilogically), I'll be copypasting from my wamp64 copy of wikimoon, the episode is:
Operation: Pandora 44 (ＯＰパンドラ４４)

Operation: Pandora 44 is the _____th episode of Sailor Moon Tokyoma Gaiden, This episode is an adaptation of the Codename: Sailor V chapter Sailor V Arrives! - "Channel 44" Pandora's Ambition with certain elements changed, examples include:

• Pandora is no longer the mastermind of the brainwashing plot, instead it is the name Katerina Suino takes while infiltrating the Dark Agency. The mastermind role is given to Antevision.
• The antennas have been replaced with cable boxes, as channels above 13 are not found on televisions (without PSIP.)
• The addition of Malachite (Shinji Kent) and Carrie Talgia into the plot.

Summary
Katerina arrives at the building for the Dark Agency, while she is initially hesitant, she is encouraged by someone on her communicator to enter the building, her purpose: to collect intelligence on their next target. she is soon greeted by Carrie and Shinji who welcome her into the agency with open arms.

A few days later, Pinako spots posters for the new idol, Pandora, who will be debuting on Cable Channel 44 after an opening of a new shopping center, and unobtrusively takes one of them. Her mother, Kurenai chides her, saying that she doesn't have time to obsess over idols, Pinako however, says the idol looks familiar to her.

As Daniel runs to school, he crashes into Pinako, and her poster falls into the gutter and is ruined. Daniel apologises to Pinako for the trouble, with Pinako explaining that the poster wasn't for a pretty decoration, both of them meet up with Katerina and head to class. During lunch, the three think about their role in stopping the Dark Agency, Pinako thinks about the poster and the idol's similarity to Katerina but quickly tosses it away when Katerina herself brings up the topic of the Idol Pandora. They talk about Pandora's debut that night, Pinako is dismayed that she can't get cable. One of her friends tells her that Channel 44 has been handing out cable boxes to people so everyone can watch the premiere at home, Katerina however, sends a signal to Daniel and Pinako, warning them not to get the boxes.

Back at the Aino residence, Minako attempts to hook up the cable box, but can't get it connected. When Pinako gets upset about it, her mother yells at her for suddenly saying she doesn't want cable. Disappointed, Pinako goes to bed, figuring that she'll have to ask Katerina about the show.

Katerina meanwhile, is in a dressing room, wondering if she warned her friends in time, Carrie assures her that her deceitful friends should be getting what they deserve tonight, Katerina tells Carrie that it isn't too late, both of them could leave the Agency and not look back, Carrie is adamant that the Sailor Senshi are the real bad guys in this situation, especially Mercury, which saddens Katerina.

The next day, Pinako arrives home to find her mother watching the tv, which has static on the screen and is emitting a strange sound that immediately makes hers and Minako's head hurt. She tries to turn the tv off, but not matter what step is taken, the tv won't shut off. Daniel and Artemis arrive, Daniel's pen to his ear and tells Pinako to get her pen out and listen; as they listen to the signal, Boss tells them that Cable Channel 44 and Pandora are part of a plot to brainwash the entire country of Japan, as the first step toward world conquest. Pinako and Daniel rush off to Cable Channel 44 to stop the brainwashing signal.

As they are heading towards Cable Channel 44, Carrie spots them and tries to attack them, but they shake her off. the two arrive at Cable Channel 44 with the Gate Guard unconscious, they begin their search of the building but can't find Pandora - the dressing room is empty and all the mirrors have been removed.

In the meantime, Carrie wanders the halls, looking for Daniel and Pinako.

Pandora performs on stage for her brainwashed fans with a knowing frown, telling them that they don't have to study or work, they just need to listen to her and be her slaves. She goes to take a break and happens upon Daniel, who asks her where Katerina is, Carrie catches up to the two, but Pinako arrives in time and uses her Crescent Boomerang to knock Carrie away from them. She then transforms into Sailor Pinako and declares that she won't let Pandora continue her brainwashing plot.

Pandora tells Pinako to use the compact mirror to reflect Pandora's true form, and when she does, Pandora is revealed to be Katerina. Another Monster is revealed to be pulling the strings on the brainwashing operation, and challenges Pinako by jumping into a dark portal, causing her to give chase. Katerina and Daniel transform into Sailor Mercury II and Mars Warrior, respectively, and aim their attacks towards the signal distribution center, destroying the energy draining signal.

Meanwhile, Sailor Pinako corners the monster in a ring, to which the Monster welcomes her to "The Negative World of Darkness", The monster initially has the upper hand, until Mars Warrior arrives with Sailor Mercury II and knock Antevision to the floor. With Antevision distracted, Sailor Pinako uses Moon Vine Laser to destroy him, releasing his hold over the brainwashed masses.

Carrie watches the events unfold, and although she is reluctant to do so, swears revenge on Katerina as well.

Everyone wakes up again and realises it's a saturday. Pinako proposes a pizza party while Katerina sings as herself. Artemis snatches a slice of pizza, ending the episode on a happy note.

 

[KingPriceman]

Episode 001/201: Youma Child Pinako's Shining Transformation
Dub Episode 160: Start of a New Generation

This episode is about how Pinako became a Sailor Senshi, it concerns three monsters who have a plan to capture energy for a mysterious person named Ashura.

Episode Synopsis from a document I made to keep track of the story I want to put down:

Pinako Aino is a young Youma girl who was raised in Tokyo, Japan. She has recently been accepted into and given permission to attend Shiba Koen Municipal Junior High School. As Pinako and her mother, Kurenai eat breakfast, Minako is welcomed into the apartment by opening the door, As she talks to Pinako about her upcoming school day, she reminisces about her own school days, which are less than pleasant. As Minako drives her niece, Pinako to school, she begins to tell Pinako about how she is destined to bring about a new change in the guard, however, before Minako could finish, Pinako leaves the car and goes into school while reminiscing about her own elementary school days at Youma-Kai Elementary School. As Pinako goes into class, the teacher, Mr. Tenma Motaru greets the class and does roll call. Pinako studies in the class and gets spitballed by Hiroshi, who dares her to drain his energy. As Pinako shrugs off Hiroshi’s insult, two students, Omizuki and Mizudzuki watch her with a great interest. As the three finally meet in the hallway, they have a conversation where Mizudzuki gives Pinako a strange speaker box. All the while Mr. Motaru is contacting someone in a building called “Dark Agency Headquarters”, where a man named Ashura is being asked why he sent three monsters into the school, Ashura tells Motaru that he sent two monsters as promised and wants to know who the third monster is, and is angered to learn that the third one resembles a D.D. Girl. Ashura tells Motaru to incorporate her into his plans. Once school is let out, Pinako is informed about the talent show occurring later that very night. Kurenai believes the box Pinako was given to be suspicious and tries telling Minako about it, who is insistent on Taking Pinako to the talent show. As the talent show begins, Pinako begins singing to the judges, who are enamored with her voice and songs. Kurenai and Minako finally talk about the box and realize that Pinako is being set up for something, just as it falls from her person. As Pinako begins to celebrate her achievement in the talent shot, Hiroshi begins to torment her about draining energy from the people in in the audience and on stage until Minako stops Hiroshi from causing torment. Hiroshi runs off to get Mr. Motaru while Minako congratulates Pinako on a job well done on stage, as Hiroshi begins to tell Mr. Motaru about what is happening on stage, Mr. Motaru takes Hiroshi’s energy. Minako gives Pinako her very own transformation pen, the one Minako used during her days as Sailor V. Pinako utters the phrase “Moon Power Transformation, Make up!” and transforms into Sailor Pinako. As Motaru, Omizuki and Mizudzuki begin talking about how Pinako could get destroyed, they are surprised by her as a Sailor Guardian. And begin going after her, with her from Her mother, Kurenai Aino, as D.D. Girl III, and Minako Aino, as the original Sailor Venus, the monsters are repelled and destroyed. Ashura is informed of this and is angered to learn of a Monster that is also a Sailor Guardian. The next day, someone goes up to Pinako and offers to become her friend.


Sub Script: 第１話「愛野ピナコ、特別な妖魔の子」 FINAL.pdf
Dub Script: 第１話「愛野ピナコ、特別な妖魔の子」 dUB SCRIPT.pdf (This script is a first draft script, another draft is undergoing some outside editing, an updated one will be available when it's revised.)

 

[KingPriceman]

if anyone's read it, what do you think of it?

 

[YuYu Yuichiro]

if anyone's read it, what do you think of it?

I only read the summery in the 2nd post and the story synopsis in the third post. I probably should've looked back at the characters' designs before reading because I was trying to imagine the events in my head. I couldn't remember what Carrie, Hiroshi and some other characters looked like. iirc the general vibe reminds me of Sailor Moon during the Sato era. I appreciate Minako's relationship with Pinako. I'm guessing Hiroshi is Pinako's bully.

I'll probably comment again when I read the dub or and sub script.

 

[KingPriceman]

I couldn't remember what Carrie, Hiroshi and some other characters looked like. iirc the general vibe reminds me of Sailor Moon during the Sato era. I appreciate Minako's relationship with Pinako. I'm guessing Hiroshi is Pinako's bully.

Carrie's design is in a CCG related post in the character thread, Hiroshi has none, but you can refer to the Usagi's classmates settei for any potential design.
Yes, he is!

I'll probably comment again when I read the dub or and sub script.

Watch what you read:
Dub script: Consistent with the DiC Dub, and has no scenery descriptions
Sub Script: Consistent with the original Japanese Version/Viz dub and has descriptions of certain scenes.

 

[KingPriceman]

Working on a script for Episode 2, I'll post a snippet here for a preview:

Daniel Kano: “Ok, so what would happen if someone was to beat the game?”

Mickey Delano: “No one ever has, not even the high scorers”

Daniel: “What?!”

Pinako Aino: “Oh NO!”

The classic game over screen is shown to Pinako on the next screen the following names and scores are shown. 4th ranking is blank with a confirmed score of 2,023 points, this is Pinako’s score.

AMI 108710 – Ami’s Score, Not a random number
USA 009237 – Usagi’s Score, Not a random number
KAE 004450 – Reference to Kae Araki
002023 – Pinako’s Score, Not a random number
MNK 000891 – Minako’s Score, Not a random number

Pinako: “I just have to push further!, I’ve got to beat this game!”

Daniel: “Uhhh Pinako? Don’t you think you’ve had enoug-”

Pinako: “No, it’s never enough! This game is the most exciting game I’ve ever played!”

Daniel: “Uhhhh…”

It's obvious here something has changed, as the game and scores look and sound awfully familiar, but is it the same place Usagi used to go to? Find out once I finish the full thing.

If you're a Pokemon fan, Mickey Delano is the restaurant owner from "Showdown in Dark City".

 

[KingPriceman]

It's good to have an outline written so the story can be made, I have Episode 2 written down now
The episode title is:
Sub: A Demonic Game! A Fearful Trap
Dub: Pinako's Video Panic (This is also the Production title, as seen in the script)

Synopsys of the story:
Continuing off from the previous episode, Daniel Kano introduces himself to Pinako Aino. While he gets slightly teased for befriending a Youma, Daniel promises to show Pinako some of his favorite places in Tokyo after school. Once the bell rings and people leave Shiba Koen Municipal Junior High School, Daniel takes Pinako on a trip around the Azabu-Juban area and spots one of his favorite spots in Tokyo, Mickey Dee’s (A McDonald’s parody), Daniel and Pinako enter the establishment and meet the owner of the restaurant, Mickey Delano, who bought the building from the Furuhata family in the early 2000s.
When Pinako asks why a restaurant would have an arcade cabinet, Mickey tells her that it’s a holdover from the previous owners. The machine could not be moved, for some reason, when all of the other cabinets were moved out, that lone cabinet was somehow bolted to the floor of the then-new restaurant. Pinako goes over to look at the game and begins to play it, to which Daniel orders a couple of burgers and milkshakes. Pinako starts to focus on the game to an unnerving extent. Mickey warns Daniel that a few people have died playing that game due to them putting the game itself as the top priority over everything else, even their hunger and thirst.
As Pinako’s score goes higher, Daniel is crestfallen that Pinako hasn’t come over to get her burger and shake yet. The game playing continues on into the late afternoon when Daniel says that he has to get back home, asking if Pinako would like to be escorted back home, she accepts and picks up the burger and shake. Once the two arrive at Juban odyssey, Daniel bids Pinako a goodbye for the night, once Daniel is out of sight, Pinako looks at the food and drink and runs away from the Odyssey. Once Daniel gets home, he looks up the list for an “Aino” and calls one of the only two “Aino”s in the area (Not in the Script, scene has been reimagined), he gets Kurenai on the phone and asks how Pinako has been doing since she got home, only to find out she never went in the building.
Daniel, Kurenai and Minako begin searching around the Azabu-Juban area for Pinako, Kurenai asks the various Youma in the area, all of whom say they have not seen her, while Minako asks anyone else if they have seen a little girl with wings on her head, all of whom say that they have not. Daniel comes across Mickey who asks if he’s come to pick up his friend again, Daniel is surprised to hear that Pinako went back to the restaurant. Daniel finds Kurenai and Minako and tells them he’s found her.
They all arrive at Mickey Dee’s and enter the restaurant and find Pinako playing the game again. She is in a trance of playing the game, Artemis arrives and tells the three that The Sailor V game cabinet was supposed to be a secret entrance, with which it could have been used, when Minako asks why they didn’t tell the original Sailor Guardians about this, Artemis responds that it was ultimately not needed since Rei’s place was a suitable substitute.
This ticks Daniel off and he asks Artemis what can be done to stop Pinako from playing the game. He responds that since she’s a Monster, all that can be done is to let her play until she loses her energy and turns into dust, but also that the machine doesn’t affect Sailor Guardians. This bit of information ticks of the other two as they tell Artemis that Pinako IS a Sailor Guardian and she still got affected by the machine. They decide that since the machine doesn’t affect Sailor Guardians that they’ll have to trick her into Transforming, it works and the machine’s affects on her body fade away. All four glare at Artemis and tell him to remove the game, all is well the next day.

Sub Script: 第２話「ピナコのビデオパニック」 FINAL.pdf
Dub Script: 第２話「ピナコのビデオパニック」 DUB SCRIPT.pdf

A Little note about Daniel Kano: him referencing the original DiC dub is going to be a running gag about him, even in the subbed version.

 

[YuYu Yuichiro]

I read the script for "Youma Child Pinako's Shining Transformation."

• So, this is the Ashura or the blue haired guy.
• 
• I still enjoy the bond between Minaki and Pinako.
• When That girl punched Pinako in the stomach I was trying to imagine if it was a really hard punch, or a fake hard punch.
• In scene 13 with the "Old Lady" I think there was a sentence where you had put a question mark before the sentence ended.
• Energy Stealing class. For some reason I imagine they kidnapped humans or abducted animals from farms or something for practice and they were labeled as aliens for the mysterious disappearances of animals
• I keep imagining Hiroshi as an older version of that kid from the Venus/Jupiter power up episode in SuperS.
• Is the friend she made at the end of the story Daniel, Katerina or someone else [edit: I looked at the beginning of the next story, never mind]
• How and where do you write the story like this? It seems more pleasing than reading a google doc.

 

[KingPriceman]

I read the script for "Youma Child Pinako's Shining Transformation."

• So, this is the Ashura or the blue haired guy.
• 
  .

Yes! it is.

• I still enjoy the bond between Minaki and Pinako.
• When That girl punched Pinako in the stomach I was trying to imagine if it was a really hard punch, or a fake hard punch.
• In scene 13 with the "Old Lady" I think there was a sentence where you had put a question mark before the sentence ended.
• Energy Stealing class. For some reason I imagine they kidnapped humans or abducted animals from farms or something for practice and they were labeled as aliens for the mysterious disappearances of animals
• I keep imagining Hiroshi as an older version of that kid from the Venus/Jupiter power up episode in SuperS.
• Is the friend she made at the end of the story Daniel, Katerina or someone else [edit: I looked at the beginning of the next story, never mind]
• How and where do you write the story like this? It seems more pleasing than reading a google doc.

• Yup, the bond is so sweet, a complete 180. I plan to put in a flashback scene in the far future.
• it was a really hard punch, adapted from the 'pages'
• what're you, my proofreader? Actually, answer "yes" to that, 'cause I might need one.
• This guy is singlehandedly responsible for coming up with Youma-Kai Elementary's entire curriculum.
• I'll get back to you on that, he's supposed to be Pinako's age. that kid would have probably been one of the teachers in Pinako's time.
• Edit answered that question for me
• would you believe the layout is adapted from the official Sailor Moon scripts. the pictures on the first and last pages should tip someone off to that.

Anywho, sometime soon, I gotta write down summaries for Episodes 3 onwards, some of them will probably be modern reinterpretations of classic Sailor Moon episodes while others will try to get the charm of one of them.

 

[YuYu Yuichiro]

Sub: A Demonic Game! A Fearful Trap

• I can't believe it took me till the end to realize Daniel's an American name.
• This has nothing to do with the story, but it felt so weird how many spellings of Kumada's name there are:
• Yuichiro, Yuuichiro, Yuichirou, Yuuichirouu, MaleRei, etc.
• I also just got the 'lighter' line.
• "Usagi Treatment"
• Usagi didn't like Pinako? “It can’t be though, we’ve introduced Pinako to Usagi, Rei, Ami and Mako, though Usagi didn’t really take her too kindly.”
• So, citizen Youma actually died playing the game?! Mickey Dee mentioned some players dropping dead.

 

[KingPriceman]

• I can't believe it took me till the end to realize Daniel's an American name.

It's generally an english name, and the first hint.

• This has nothing to do with the story, but it felt so weird how many spellings of Kumada's name there are: Yuichiro, Yuuichiro, Yuichirou, Yuuichirouu, MaleRei, etc.

One of them's Male Rei? Where'd that come from?

• I also just got the 'lighter' line.

how to get as close as you can to "Lita" while writing for Minako.

• "Usagi Treatment"

"How to embarass one Usagi Tsukino in the 2020's"
Step 1. Have someone else look like her.
Step 2. Have someone act like her.
Step 3. Make sure Usagi is around before doing steps 1 and 2.

• Usagi didn't like Pinako? “It can’t be though, we’ve introduced Pinako to Usagi, Rei, Ami and Mako, though Usagi didn’t really take her too kindly.”

How would you feel if one of the killers of your four friends turned up with a kid that wants to meet you as a fan? (I also might be channeling a bit of her subsen variant here, since Subsen Minako told Subsen Pinako one time to "Make Sure Usagi never knows" about her being a Sailor Senshi)

• So, citizen Youma actually died playing the game?! Mickey Dee mentioned some players dropping dead.

It's possibly a trap in case someone unauthorized were to use the cabinet. (Hence the second half of the name, "A Fearful Trap")

I think this should address your concerns, I am now looking forward to finishing Episode 3's synopsis and making the script soon after that happens.

 

[KingPriceman]

The Dub Script for episode 2 has finally been created, try to compare and contrast what you know from the sub and dub (there is one part that is indicated to be cut from the dub episode, mind that for now. it may yet be revised.)

 

[KingPriceman]

The Synopsis for Episode 3 has finally been written. No script yet though, Well, it's time for the Episode Title!
The Title of the Episode is:
"Production" Title: 守れ恋の曲2！ピナコはキューピッド (Protect the Melody of Love 2! Pinako is a Cupid)
Sub: Seedy’s CD! Protect the Production USB!
Dub: Melody of the Negaverse

Synopsis:
Anjiro uncovers a failed plan by the Dark Kingdom to extract human energy using the sound waves of music. When a trial using a modified sound is played next to a pair of plants, once the music reaches its crescendo, the plants wilt and fade away, Stunning Ashura and the board of directors When asked where he got the plan and how it can be modernized, Anjiro says that a more modern means of delivery can be used to transfer the sound waves onto CDs. Some time later, at an undisclosed apartment complex, a little Youma is bidding her father good night and is going to bed when she hears a scream coming from her father. She runs into the room and sees Anjiro, and demands to know who he is and what he’s doing here. Anjiro replies by knocking the Youma’s father out and saying she must do one job for him, and if she does not comply, Anjiro will kill her father.
The next day, the students in Pinako’s class are discussing the latest Audio CD from a musician named Seedy Daiyamondo, which Daniel thinks is a weird name. At the JAM Records Building, the Youma Girl, Ongakin has managed to infiltrate the production team as part of Anjiro’s modernized plan to insert sound waves, and insert the USB drive, She is hypnotized by Seedy Daiyamondo’s singing, finding it to be fantastic. Once the recording session is finished, the music is uploaded to the plugged in USB drive and is taken by an employee. Ongakin is scared that the USB is now missing before she spots the employee walking away with the USB drive. Ongakin tries going after the employee with the USB drive and she walks towards Seedy who responds by asking for the demo CD on the next day they meet before it goes to be authored.
As Seedy leaves Jam Records, He’s walking towards the Shiba Koen Middle school where dozens of fangirls run up to him, asking for autographs as he runs away from said fangirls. As Pinako and Daniel spot Seedy running from the fangirls, they begin to follow for a very different reason. While Daniel says he doesn’t know why, he believes he might be tied up in something. At a Junkyard, Ongakin is discussing with Anjiro with how the plan can be salvaged, as Anjiro threatens not only Ongakin’s father’s life, but her own as well.
Pinako and Daniel arrive at a Dance Club where the sign says “No Monsters allowed”, to which Daniel puts makeup on Pinako in response, as well as a hat, to make her look more human. They enter to watch Seedy Daiyamondo begin playing the bass guitar, along with his band, “The Jewelers”, once the audience starts clapping Pinako and Daniel notice that Seedy is missing. As the band begin preparations to go to another venue, the lights begin dimming. And Ongakin stands in the way as she subdues the band to take the USB. Once the band is unconscious, she begins leaving, only to find Pinako and Daniel in her way now, leaping over them to head back to the JAM Records Building.
Pinako takes off, carrying Daniel towards the building. At the building, the staff are also unconscious as Ongakin inserts the USB into the computer. Before she can activate the file, Daniel tackles Ongakin and heads to the computer to find the file. As Pinako faces Ongakin, Ongakin demands Daniel relinquish control of the computer. Seedy soon arrives on the scene and is held hostage by Ongakin. Daniel manages to find the file and wipe the file from the USB drive permanently, and flings the now empty USB back to Ongakin! Ongakin flees the building as Pinako Transforms into Sailor Pinako and takes off with Daniel after Ongakin.
The three soon meet again at the Music Hall, where Anjiro is waiting with Ongakin’s Father, Stating that he is disappointed at the outcome of the plan, since a Sailor Guardian was able to foil it, as Sailor Pinako and Daniel realize that Ongakin was unwillingly following orders, Pinako launches her Moonlight Vine Laser towards Anjiro, who blocks the beams too easily, throwing Ongakin’s father off to the side and walks towards Pinako, introducing himself and offering her a chance to join the Dark Agency before he jumps into a portal leading back there. Pinako fires a final beam at the portal, dissipating it, meanwhile Seedy and everyone else are waking up. Pinako, Minako and Daniel are listening to the latest track, Much to Kurenai’s Chagrin.

Sub Script: [NOT WRITTEN YET]
Dub Script: [NOT WRITTEN YET]

This post will be edited to include links to the scripts if and when they are finished.

 

[YuYu Yuichiro]

The Dub Script for episode 2 has finally been created, try to compare and contrast what you know from the sub and dub

• So, Serena's upset Theia turned that Tuxedo trick on her.
• Who's the girl with the egg in her arms Mickey Dee mintioned?
• So, Motoki's Mickey Dee's nephew.
• They just drop into a coma here.
• I like how the "YOU WANT TO TAKE MY ENERGY, THEN I’LL FIGHT BACK!" have different energies between commercial breaks.
• Alright, so there's also a Pinako Says for the Dic versions as well.

 

[KingPriceman]

• So, Serena's upset Theia turned that Tuxedo trick on her.

See Ep. 40 of the dub

• Who's the girl with the egg in her arms Mickey Dee mentioned?

One hint: Water Type Tomboyish Mermaid

Another Hint: Said egg had shapes in two colors

And the fact I just realized that it would be impossible to this 'egg' to have even appeared during the mentioned event.

• So, Andrew's Mickey Dee's nephew.

only in the dub, no such relation was established or implied in the sub (Also corrected the name for consistency)

• They just drop into a coma here.
• I like how the "YOU WANT TO TAKE MY ENERGY, THEN I’LL FIGHT BACK!" have different energies between commercial breaks.
• Alright, so there's also a Pinako Says for the Dic versions as well.

these last three are all dub related
first one censors out death, typical.
Second one See any episode of the old dub where the second break is on the same scene
for the third one, the first episode lacked it, and future episodes will probably lack theirs.

 

[KingPriceman]

almost a year later, coming back to this thread, I finally have a good idea for it.
The inspiration for this newest idea came from The Transformers' Fifth season (which was basically a compilation of already aired episodes with live-action bookends at the beginning and end of the episodes.) The idea for the newest script is: (This would be DiC/CWi Dub-Only, we can't apply this to the original Japanese or ViZ versions.) There is a Pre-Tokyo Side Stories Pinako who is contacted by Central Control and is told about the stories of the Sailor Scouts, and it would cover at least 10 episodes for each arc.
Now, for the hilarity!

Side Pros:
It's the shortened, No-filler adaptation people wanted!

Side Cons:
A Doom Tree episode will have to be edited into a NegaMoon episode.
It'll leave out important episodes (which are considered filler anyway)

Here's a snippet showing the first episode! and yes, it's styled like a dub script (go around the internet, you might catch an image of one)


SM TOKYO SIDE STORIES INTERIM – S1E1/S5E160 – PINAKO & CENTRAL SEGMENTS

START: 59:30:02

**16001 – 59:59:14 THEME SONG

“A Moon Star is Born”

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**16002 – 00:31:00

CENTRAL: *(vo) Hello… Little Pinako.

PINAKO: Who? Who said that?

CENTRAL: You do not know me, and I don’t have much time.

PINAKO: Who are you?

CENTRAL: I am a family friend, You may call me Central Control

PINAKO: Central… Are you my aunt’s boss?

CENTRAL: Your aunt Mina? Of course, through a slightly sarcastic comment, she asked Artemis to tell you about her old adventures… and then he asked me to do it for him, honestly those two…

PINAKO: Is it true that Artemis isn’t the only space kitty around?

CENTRAL: Oh my, you’re a very curious one, nothing like your mother. Well, it is true that Artemis isn’t the only one out there. It started a very long time ago, but I’ll tell you about that later. You wanted to hear about the exploits of Luna and her own partner, right?

PINAKO: I wanna hear about them, I wanna!

CENTRAL: oh ho ho, very well, let me start from the beginning.

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(cut into episode)
CENTRAL: Luna’s partner was a lot like your Aunt Mina – Silly, special, sleepy, a bit messy.

PINAKO: Her name’s Serena, isn’t she?

CENTRAL: How did you know? Did my hints give it away?
PINAKO: Well, Kinda… She doesn’t like monsters like me.

CENTRAL: Once I tell you the story, you’ll understand why.

===========================================================================
(Commercial Break)

PINAKO: I wanna listen to more of the story

CENTRAL: Only after these messages.

===========================================================================
(Coming Back from Commercial Break)

PINAKO: The messages are gone!

CENTRAL: Ok, now where was I?

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(Exiting the Episode)

CENTRAL: Well, I suppose that’s it, really. Sailor Moon’s first night was a bit hectic, but if it wasn’t for her, this world would have been doomed to be an evil counterpart.

PINAKO: That Tuxedo Mask doesn’t look that nice to me

CENTRAL: I see you might be catching on, but I won’t let that card be revealed just yet.

PINAKO: I can’t believe Narun’s mom tried taking all of that energy though, why not just buy a lot of energy drinks?

CENTRAL: oh, you silly little one, energy drinks were not available at that point in time. But do you know what was?

PINAKO: No? What was available?

CENTRAL: An ancient device called a ‘Floppy Disk’, and that’s what the next Negaverse weapon is in the next story. Admittedly, I could have- well, I’ll tell you next time.

PINAKO: Can you show me who you are yet?

CENTRAL: I’m afraid I can’t, you never know who… or what, is listening in. Have a good night, Pinako.

PINAKO: … what a strange TV channel, what else is on?

 

[KingPriceman]

The 'Pinako is Tommy Kennedy and Central Control is Optimus Prime' treatment of the first arc is ready, this script covers episodes 1, 5/8, 7/10 and 10/13

SM DUB Pinako Segments - Jedite Arc.pdf

What are your thoughts on this?

 

[KingPriceman]

Pinako segments have been updated, if anyone reads this, do you have any thoughts on it?

Episode Treatments2.pdf

 

[KingPriceman]

And I've finally finished with Pinako's bookends for the Dub's first arc

Episode Treatments - Full First Arc.pdf

This is probably going to become a project in and of itself... one that once again I may not finish.

If you have any thoughts on it, please drop a few opinions by, especially since the episodes were chosen to make it as "Manga Accurate" as possible.